Desiree Fox(WIP)

[Desiree Fox]

Full name:Desiree Hope Fox
Nickname:Des
*Codename:Liquid Mistress
*Preferred name:Desiree
Canon or Non-canon:Non-canon
Gender:Female
Sexual Orientation:Straight
Birthplace:Vancouver, Canada
Current residence: Genosha
DOB: December 18
Age:33
Height:5' 6"
Weight: 111 lbs.
Hair color: dark blonde
Eye color: Green
Identifying features (i.e. scars, birthmarks, etc): Birthmark in a place no one can see. Has a belly ring.
Appearance: Dawn has dark blonde hair, dark green eyes, has a tanned complexion and is slender. She wears just about anything but the majority of her outfits show off her body; which she loves to do. She'll wear skimpy outfits most of the time, like short skirts with high heels and small tops. But she will also dress modestly if it is appropriate for the occasion.
*Uniform: None

Occupation: None
Species (human or mutant): mutant
*Powers: Hydrokinesis - the ability to control and manipulate water, but not create it.
*What was the reaction your family had to your powers?:Her Step-Father hated that she had the powers.
*Do you do anything to hide obvious powers?: No
Weapons: None
Equipment: None
Alliance (X-Men, Brotherhood, Sinister, SHIELD, neutral):Brotherhood
Personality: Desiree is very outspoken, no matter who she is speaking to she will say what’s on her mind and not sugarcoat any of it. She is very assertive and goes after the things she wants and lets nothing get in her way. When it comes to moving up in social or economic status Desiree is cold and naturally ruthless. The kind of girl who takes control of something and doesn't give it up until she’s finished with it. However, she is very rarely known to actually be kind and loving to those who she is closest with.

Family:Father - Anthony Hewitt (56, Mutant, Unkown)
Mother - Sara Fox (48, Human, Waitress)
Step-fater-Brian Fox(52,Human,Owner of a fashion line)
Family Influence: Her mother who looked out for her.
*Registered?: no
Background: Desiree was born to Anthony Hewitt and Sara Fox in Vancouver, Canada. Desiree never now who her father was. She knew of her step-father Brian Fox. She was a smart child growing up. She went to the best schools her step-father and mother could afford. She has three half brothers and one half sister which are on her father side of the family. But she doesn't know who they are. When she was younger she loved her step father and mother.

Desiree had a happy childhood. She went to school went she was 5 years old. And made a few friends. As she got older she made more friends and did the drama club and science club. She soon was dating a boy name Jonathan. She like this boy a lot as well did her mother and step father. He was the captain of the football team in Junior high school. But when she got up to senior high school Jonathan moved away. She still was part of the drama club and science club.

At the age of 16 her power started to develop, the family had decided to take a trip to the beach and Desiree was attempting to build a sandcastle. The tide however kept coming up and ruining what she had done. After about the fourth time, she lay her hands on the water as it came up. The water quickly retreated, the area around the castle remaining dry, even though it seemed to go up, around it just the same. Soon her step-father got mad at her. Like she never seen him before. He grabbed her by the arm and pulled her to the car yelling at her. Desiree got scared of her step-father. That was the day she and her mother found out he didn't like mutant. Her mother was to scared to stop him.


After a few months Desiree had been beaten her step-father every day. So she had it. She had just turned 17 years old and ran away from home. She traveled out of Vancouver down to New York. She found a place to stay out and began stripping in order to pay her way while she finished high school down there. She continued stripping and that helped her pay her way through college where she got a regular associates degree and even after graduating she became a waitress full time.


Ever since she came to New York she has been training herself to use her powers. From time to time she had lost control of them; she knows she still has a lot to learn. She soon joined the Brotherhood.

Skills: Desiree is an excellent swimmer and dancer (both regular and erotic). She is highly skilled with computers and some electronic devices, she is no hacker though. Desiree is also a moderately skilled hand to hand fighter.
Loves: Men,Flirting,the moon.
Hates: being alone, being hurt,crowds
Strengths:
Weaknesses: She is vulnerable to electric attacks (cause she has water based powers). Her mouth can be her greatest weakness because it gets her into more trouble then she bargains for when dealing with the wrong kinds of people. As a result of her lack of training she develops lethal headaches the longer she uses her powers; as a result she is limited in how long she can use them.

Anything else?: Anything else we should know?
RP sample: Only for canon characters. This should be at least 2 full paragraphs.

Keyword found in rules: admin edit

[Remy LeBeau]

I usually don't like to review until profiles are complete because they always tend to change a lot. However, I will tell you that the keyword is incorrect, and no doctor would ever tell someone to dye a baby's hair. Pregnant mothers can't even dye their hair.

[Logan]

1) Appearance is lacking, it needs to be at least two paragraphs in length. Try going more into her style, her fathers a fashion designer, is she a fashionista? If so describe how we'd see her on a normal day.

2) It's the same with the personality. Again two paragraph minimum. "Hunger's for the love of a man," is she an "open lover" or just a hopeless romantic. Why does she want a man so bad? Whats her pet peeve, what kind of music does she like to sing. Is it Karaoke or opera.

3) The family reaction could be explained more. You just say scared, I have to wonder of what? I'm thinking not of her since her mother is a mutant herself. Perhaps of how the world will react to their daughter, for her safety, her childhood? Or maybe it is of her and that she might burn the house down one day, just be a little more specific.

4) Something to think about. She lived in France most of her life, does she speak with a heavy accent? I know they fade, and I'm not saying Gambit's faking but... Anyway that could go in your identifying features.

5) Your strengths isn't just how strong you are physically, but what you're good at. Talents, skills, are you a good strategist, hardworking, great leader etc...

6) Finally your history is a bit lacking. Most powers develop during teen years, since she's 17 now I'm guessing the butler incident happen right before she was invited to the Xavier Institute. Maybe go into a little more detail as to why she went into a fury at the butler's touch. Was it inappropriate? Did he hit her? Another thing, Charlie makes very few house calls anymore, it's very unlikely he showed up in France to offer you a place in the Institute: no offense I'm sure you're a lovely girl and all just the man's getting up there in age. Perhaps when you powers developed your parents sought out help and found the Institute. Speaking of your parents, it is difficult to understand exactly how they felt about you. Were they ashamed, did the keep you sheltered and homed schooled. Also if they dyed your hair, why is it green now. Did you dye it back after coming to the school. All these things will help.

[Remy LeBeau]

My one comment to add that I just thought of now, as for skills, she's bilingual I assume.

[Desiree Fox]

Done

[Remy LeBeau]

For starters, it's either Paars, or Paris. I'm not sure which one you're talking about.

Powers: These need to be explained in full. How does she control them? How is she not aware of it if she's going to a school for mutants?

Family Reaction: How do her parents know about her if she herself doesn't even know?

Personality: This completely contradicts what you said in the appearance. It also contradicts itself. She isn't shy about her body or singing, yet she's super shy? That doesn't really work.

History: This is lacking a lot of description. How old was she during some of these things? As well, Xavier only makes house calls for the most extreme cases, otherwise it's up to the others to do it. And again, if she doesn't know about her powers, why would they? A single death wouldn't make them go looking for mutants in the area. And how exactly did he die anyway?

You mention her going to the institute twice, one right after the other. Please proof-read before submitting.

Strengths/weakness: You cannot opt to fill things in later. As well, each one needs three.